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Post by Blaze on Jan 28, 2010 18:24:46 GMT -5
Name: Venus
Age: Kitten (about 6)
Appearance: Yellow-orange solid queen with red arm/legwarmers and a red muzzle. She has red "eyeshadow" and the same color of yellow as her headfur with black tips on her ears. She has red stripes on her tail and bright orange eyes.
Personality: Is a little energetic kitten and is completely obnoxious, when she wants to. She is usually sweet and caring but can be mean too. She is named after the roman god of love and beauty, so of course she is lovable and beautiful ((No she is NOT meant to be a Mary-sue if that's what you guys are thinking))
Faults: As I said in the personality she can be totally obnoxious and energetic. But can also be mean and moody. She can get into so much trouble that the adult cats want to spank her (Like Blaze does to Pounce XD)
Sample Post: Snow was piling down and Venus stumbled down an icy hill. She shivered and held herself for warmth. Her eyes looked around but saw nothing but snow. She waould rather be sweating in the heat in summer. She collapsed and curled up in a ball. Sudddenly she wanted someone to to find her. 'It's gonna be a long winneter' she thought. It was going to be a long one indeed.
((I meant for the typo in winter, she can't speak correctly because she's only six))
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Post by Cafalle on Jan 30, 2010 6:36:22 GMT -5
History? No offence, but aren't most of your characters just a little MarySue like? (beautiful, smart, funny, perfect... actually no, I like blaze lol)
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Post by Blaze on Jan 31, 2010 16:22:39 GMT -5
Ohhh...I totally forgot to do the history *facepalm* I just did the thing off the top of my memory.anyways, I'll so it asap
Well, you GOTTA admit everyone had a little bit of Mary-sue in them, I mean..I TRY not to make them just a little. Tugger seams kinda Mary-sueish (No offence, but all the girls want him) Blaze: Awww, thanks Cafalle! *huggles*
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Post by Cafalle on Feb 1, 2010 0:31:15 GMT -5
Still got to put it in there Hurry it up, I want her in RP!
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Post by Blaze on Feb 1, 2010 15:35:19 GMT -5
I'll just do it here cause I don't feel like modifying my post History: Venus was the only survivor in the car crash. Her owners, and parents were trapped and killed in the car and she found a way to escape. Now she journys to find a home or someone to take care of her. Along the way she had Amnesia, which made her lose her sense of speaking for some reason
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Post by Cafalle on Feb 4, 2010 15:46:46 GMT -5
I really don't want to approve of 'for some reason' and 'along the way she got amnesia'. It might make more sense that the car collision made her hit her head, giving her amnesia (which is a common way of getting it anyway). Maybe she doesn't speak because she freaks out when she hears her own voice? (Like, not remembering it or something, Iunno, it's your character!)
Other than that, APPROVED!
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Post by electricia on Feb 5, 2010 18:48:59 GMT -5
Uiiiiiiiii XD She and Electra could cook out many mischiefs ... ;D
*sighs* We had a loooooooooong discussion about Mary-Sues on 'Love Story of Life' ...
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